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Question:
Progress Must Always Be Welcomed.

Write a unified essay in which you address the following:
Define 'progress' in an objective way. Explain why it could be argued that progress, as you have defined it, might not always be welcomed. Discuss, giving examples, the circumstances which influence whether or not progress should be welcomed.

My Answer:

Progress can be defined as the change leading to a goal or objective over a period of time. Progress may not always be welcomed because it means change from the current situation or circumstance to one which is unknown. The desire to remain static is often the reason why progress may be resisted. Additionally, the progress may be towards an undesired situation. For example, the progress of a person from ill health to death.

There are many circumstances which may determine whether or not progress should be welcomed. Firstly, progress often means improvement. This can be seen in the medical field where treatment of illnesses such as headaches has progressed from drilling holes in the skull to taking a painkiller. In this circumstance, progress would be welcomed because it has improved the care of the patient whilst being less invasive. Conversely, progress may not be welcomed because of the method in which it is achieved. One may argue that our expanding knowledge of the human body is due to the exploration and experimentation on the human body and foetus'. This can be seen as morally wrong and therefore, progress in this context would not be welcomed.

In conclusion, almost nothing can remain the same over time and so progress is inevitable. Therefore, it was always be welcomed as a sign of the times and sometimes, as a sign of better things to come.

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